Question 1 Response
“Changing Organizational Culture,” by Cori Wong examines the differences between equity, equality, diversity, and inclusion. Wong makes note of the key how equity and inclusion should be focused on more than diversity and equality. “Creating an inclusive culture for a diverse workforce requires becoming conscious of social identities and seeing how they are experienced in a particular context, such as the workplace.”. This quote encapsulate the cor beliefs of Wong’s argument. It demonstrates the need for a holistic review of each individual who works in a company in order to truly understand te needs of the community as a whole. The idea of diversity is placed as the end goal while equity and inclusion are set as necessary markers of success along the way. The difference between equity and equality comes into play as Wong suggests that “Rather than assume everyone is the same (or should be), it is crucially important to seek to understand how differences in identities and experiences inform how we interact with our surroundings and each other”
Question 2 Response
Wong relates each paragraph to each other in a way that enhances the form and emphasises the function of her writing. Through her text, there is a frequent use of transition words/ phrases. Some examples of these are “Although”, “In contrast”, “ On the individual level”, and “Regardless of the primary motivation”. Each of these phrases help the reader to identify a switch of topic while understanding how it relates to the overall argument. Wong also uses this same format to introduce the direct citations in the 6th paragraph “For example, gaps in pay equity among men and women are the result of gender bias, but patterns of significantly lower pay and larger pay gaps experienced by women of color reveal compounded influences of the sexist and racist bias in U.S. cul- ture more broadly construed (Hegewisch & Williams-Baron, 2018).”. This quote directly lets the reader know that what she is about to say provides supporting evidence to her claim without abruptly shifting from her own choice of words.
Hi Kayla,
I like how you were able to simplify Wong’s argument into your own words. I think when writers put things into their own words rather than just use the text it makes it much more engaging for the reader. I love that you said that “The idea of diversity is placed as the end goal while equity and inclusion are set as necessary markers of success along the way.” This stood out to me because it is something that is often overlooked. Most people think diversity comes with inclusion and equity and forget that there actually needs to be efforts made in those aspects as well for everything to work together.
As for the transitions that Wong uses, I think you did a great job with citing those out. I definitely agree that her use of transitions does show when she is changing her topic but I also think it serves to connect the paragraphs which are under the same subheading. For instance when she starts a paragraph with “for example” it shows that she is connecting the idea she is about to cite, with something that was mentioned in the previous paragraph.
Solid work, Kayla–the transition words you point to are good examples of just how essential it is for a writer to be explicit about how the segments of their argument relate to one another. That happens at the sentence-level and at the paragraph level.
Hi Kayla,
I liked how Wong emphasized the importance of acknowledging, accepting, and embracing our differences and how this can be accomplished through equity practices. Did you find her metaphor helpful way to explain the concepts. Additionally, I liked how she highlighted that diversity does not equal inclusion. That idea is commonly misunderstood.
I also think you did a really good job answering question #2. I like how you touch upon two concepts and provide examples and then analyze what she did.